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    timmytwang
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    The Room

    The Room
    by Timothy R. Yates


    The room smelled like death.
    I only left it to score or take a leak
    Or peer in the fridge for a long while
    Before deciding to do another shot.
    My world had shrunk into the room
    Leaving me breathless and alert
    For things that never occurred.

    She shared that room with me.
    We fought most all the time because
    Our habits could never quite agree as
    We lied to each other about what truth was.
    Day in and day out
    It turned out to be bloody toilet paper,
    Arguments over wants and needs.

    Death was such a tease in that room,
    Worse than she was with her lies and deceits.
    Transfixed, tantalized, I split my affection
    Between my lover and death.
    Our dance macabre was nothing more
    Than a pitiful joke that backfired
    Into a room that smelled like death.


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    timmytwang
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    Re: The Room

    I have noticed that there are exclamation points in my poem when I read it on my e-mail or when I see it on this site. Except for right here where the edit button is. So forgive me for not knowing a lot about how to operate this computer of mine.

    Thank you for reading my poem, and if you see those offending exclamations and know how I can get rid of them, do let me know. I hate it when a misplaced exclamation mark makes me feel all giddy, only to be dropped to the lowest piece of depression on Earth in an instant.

    I'll try posting another poem, and see if I can do it right.
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    scorpiomoon
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    Re: The Room

    Quote Posted in reply to the post by timmytwang: View Post
    The Room


    by Timothy R. Yates






    The room smelled like death.


    I only left it to score or take a leak


    Or peer in the fridge for a long while


    Before deciding to do another shot.


    My world had shrunk into the room


    Leaving me breathless and alert


    For things that never occurred.




    She shared that room with me.


    We fought most all the time because


    Our habits could never quite agree as


    We lied to each other about what truth was.


    Day in and day out


    It turned out to be bloody toilet paper,


    Arguments over wants and needs.




    Death was such a tease in that room,


    Worse than she was with her lies and deceits.


    Transfixed, tantalized, I split my affection


    Between my lover and death.


    Our dance macabre was nothing more


    Than a pitiful joke that backfired


    Into a room that smelled like death.

    Hey this poem is interesting I'm not sure about the "room" smelling like death, but the feeling of loss that accompanies death of love, right. And anger. Spit and piss
    ejaculate I guess too and maybe just when you know its all a dance and a joke, I can say this but I don't SMELL anything in this poem except the shot in the beginning what was it tequila or whiskey or what??
    Last edited by Barry; 11-14-2007 at 11:13 AM.
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    Sara S
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    Re: The Room

    Drugs.

    Quote Posted in reply to the post by scorpiomoon: View Post
    Hey this poem is interesting I'm not sure about the "room" smelling like death, but the feeling of loss that accompanies death of love, right. And anger. Spit and piss
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    ejaculate I guess too and maybe just when you know its all a dance and a joke, I can say this but I don't SMELL anything in this poem except the shot in the beginning what was it tequila or whiskey or what??
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